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I was so excited to join a conversation about the Bible reading. That was my first time to talk about this with others. I never read any version Bible even in Chinese. The pastor is a nice friend of Tom, who is living in Australia. Tom told me the pastor was interested in Atlassian a couple of years ago too. The world is magical. Everything may make us connection. The online meeting was fun, but not smooth because our English is not good. We are planning to talk about the next session in Chinese before we meet the pastor. I hope I can talk more in the next session.

Corrected by ChatGPT

I was so excited to join a conversation about Bible reading. It was my first time discussing this with others. I’ve never read any version of the Bible, not even in Chinese. The pastor, a good friend of Tom’s who lives in Australia, joined the discussion. Tom told me the pastor was interested in Atlassian a couple of years ago too. The world is magical—everything can connect us in unexpected ways. The online meeting was fun but a bit challenging because our English isn’t great. We’re planning to talk about the next session in Chinese before meeting the pastor. I hope I can say more in the next session.

Fixes and Explanations

• “That was my first time to talk about this with others” → “It was my first time discussing this with others”

  “First time discussing” is more natural and concise in American English.

• “I never read any version Bible even in Chinese” → “I’ve never read any version of the Bible, not even in Chinese”

  Added “of the” for grammatical correctness and adjusted tense to “I’ve never” to reflect a lifelong experience.

• “The pastor is a nice friend of Tom, who is living in Australia” → “The pastor, a good friend of Tom’s who lives in Australia, joined the discussion”

  Rephrased for smoother flow and included “joined the discussion” to clarify the pastor’s role.

• “Tom told me the pastor was interested in Atlassian a couple of years ago too”

  This is fine as is, so no changes were made.

• “The world is magical. Everything may make us connection” → “The world is magical—everything can connect us in unexpected ways”

  Improved phrasing for a natural and inspiring tone.

• “The online meeting was fun, but not smooth because our English is not good” → “The online meeting was fun but a bit challenging because our English isn’t great”

  Made it sound more conversational and less self-critical.

• “We are planning to talk about the next session in Chinese before we meet the pastor” → “We’re planning to talk about the next session in Chinese before meeting the pastor”

  Simplified phrasing for natural flow.

• “I hope I can talk more in the next session”

  No changes needed—it’s clear and natural.

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